Well, that took longer than expected!
As you know, (since I know you follow this little blog religiously) I have been doing some editing. I finished up Contact a few (ed. several) weeks ago. So when that was done I turned my sites on Connect. Same process. I used the Hemingway App which helps to focus on readability. I found it helpful to tighten things up a lot. New version is posted to Kindle and Smashwords will follow soon after I get the reformatted version through the Meatgrinder. (Seriously that is the name of Smashwords’ program that converts the files to ePub, Mobi etc.)
At this point though now I have to swear off of that stuff. You can easily turn into George Lucas and keep going back and revising, re-editing, r-writing. And we all know how that goes. I am better writer now than I was when I first typed out
No one knew what had happened to the world Before.
Only that what had been Before was now gone and all that was left was After.
Of course, none of that was Mason’s concern at this moment.
But that doesn’t mean I should be rewriting the book.
Time to move on to some new things. I will be posting a short story I wrote called “47 Seconds” in this space soon. After that I have work to do on Conflict, the Mason Chronicles Part III (Gasp! Spoiler alert!) and I think I have several other good short stories to be told. I want to branch out of the world of After, so expect to see some other places and faces.
Good advice, me thinks!
If you follow me on Twitter you may have noticed that I have doing some edits…
— Rich Jones (@IM_RichJones) February 10, 2016
Day 4 of Edits. The red is abating. Am able to sleep, but still the dreams come! #amwriting
— Rich Jones (@IM_RichJones) February 11, 2016
Day 5 of Edits. I think I am done. WooHoo! Wait…OMG…What have I done!? WHATHAVEIDONE!!? #amwriting
— Rich Jones (@IM_RichJones) February 12, 2016
Day 7 of edits. What is a Semi Colon? No seriously WTF is it!? WHATISIT? *Whimpers into glass of whiskey*
— Rich Jones (@IM_RichJones) February 15, 2016
So far I have been doing most of my writing without a good editor who doesn’t have the same name as I do. Editor’s cost money and so far I have been hedging on investing too much in this little hobby of mine.
I still don’t have an editor, but I found a nice option that I think helped me tune up the prose. I used the Hemingway Editor app in this revision. It’s a simple tool and it basically scans your text and flags various things for your consideration. Think of it like Spelling and Grammar check in Word, but where it focuses on things that make it hard to read. So it color codes sentences that may be Hard or Very Hard to read and it gives you counts on usage of Adverbs and Passive Voice. It also points out any place that there is a Simpler Alternative to what you wrote. By no means is it a replacement for a true editor, but I found it helped me zero in on sections of my writing that were not user friendly. A lot of my writing came up as Hard to read. Mostly it was because of complex sentences with lots of “and” usage that merged a few ideas together which in turn made the prose less concise and a lot less tight and readable. Kind of like that last sentence. See what I did there?
So I pushed the edited versions out and now new readers will hopefully find Contact much more enjoyable and easy to read. Also if you want to see the difference, I would suggest re-reading the first chapter. That had a lot of edits. Makes sense because it was the first one I wrote and I was trying to introduce a lot of complex ideas. As I made my way through the edits I clearly improved and found a lot less edits were required. So reading Chapter 1 – Tank, should you give you a good idea of the improvements.
No I don’t expect anyone to re read the book, this was more for new readers.
So there it is, I am working on Connect now and will let you all know how that goes.
Well, I finally went and did it. I know, “Why!?” you cry out. Well it was time.
And really, I just wanted to see what would happen…
Connect, The Mason Chronicles Part II is now enrolled in Amazon’s KDP Select program. While this program is not without some controversy in the publishing world, I did it anyway. Mainly because we are not talking about large sums of money here. I have said it before but I ain’t in it for the money. While KDP Select may lower the ceiling of $$$ I could earn on the book, it opens up a lot of advertising and promotional opportunities as far as Amazon goes. Also it puts the book in the Kindle Unlimited Library, which can also bring more eyes to the book.
The only other thing that would help more than this would have been more reviews. For now Connect only has 1 review on Amazon, and while it is a good review, there needs to be a lot more to move it up in the lists and search algorithms. So if you did read Connect, please, I beg you, go and give it a review, even if only a brief one. It helps more than anything else at this stage.
Lastly as part of this update both Connect and Contact will be Free on Amazon starting tomorrow, Thursday February 4th and through Sunday February 7th. So if you haven’t read either, now is a great time to grab them. Or rather tomorrow will be…er unless you are reading this tomorrow, which would be today…Unless you are reading this while crossing the International date line in which case you are clearly from the future and already read part 3 so no Spoilers! Seriously, who doesn’t hate Time Travelers?
Making my way back here after the Holidays and catching up on some reviews of my work. Yes some people out there on the internet have actually read my books and decided to comment on them in the various review sections available to them. As someone who appreciates feedback because I want my product to be the best it can, it’s hard to turn a blind eye. It’s not all bad (I am but a small fish in the publishing world) but I have to wonder how anyone who garners large volumes of critical attention doesn’t go Jay and Silent Bob on some folks. (Embedded video is NSFW, just in case the ‘Jay and Silent Bob’ reference didn’t forewarn you.)
Seriously though if you have read my work, please rate it, comment on it, review it, or whatever option is available to you. Or even comment here. I won’t show up at your door.
That’s what lackeys are for.
Also I have started work on a new short story project and then will probably begin work on Part 3.
Mr. Scalzi essentially says that aside from writing a great novel that people want to read, you have to be yourself and not just focus on promotion. If people find you interesting then they will more than likely look to see what it is that you are promoting. From there it comes down the product, nor novel itself. The Promotion did it’s job and got eyes on your book, and it’s up to the merits of the book to go from there. Conversely if all you do is push your wares then your audience is probably going to hit the mute button in whatever form that takes. Great advice I think especially since I know I have been guilty of the “Promote! Promote! Promote!” method.
Social media is an amazing tool for self promotion, but not all of us handle it well. I know I don’t always do good work with it. I’ll have to take this advice to heart and see where it goes.
So if you’re trying to Promote something yourself, do think this is good advice? What methods have worked for you and what have not?
In short the ‘Sins’ cover a variety of mistakes a Creator can make when framing out the World of their narrative. They cover things from 1) Not thinking about basic infrastructure (plumbing, food, waste management, etc.) to 7) Introducing some superpower, like magic or insane tech, without fully accounting for how it would change society.
It’s an interesting read especially for someone who has engaged in this practice from when I was a little 7th grader handwriting a Sci-Fi
Epic on looseleaf. I completely agree that world building is essential in Fiction and especially Fantasy and Science Fiction, and these 7 sins certainly address the authenticity of the world. The world that the characters inhabit and that the plot effects has to feel sensible, even if it it is populated by Dragons, Zombies, and Mutant Bunnies wielding chain-guns. If it fails the reader’s sniff test, then it risks breaking their suspension of disbelief. It becomes an Easter Egg hunt for what else did the author not think off when they created this world, and the story suffers for its delivery to the reader.
However, to this humble writer’s sensibilities, the worst sin when world building is when the creator has done an excellent job avoiding most, if not all of these sins, but they bring all of that detail into the foreground. I think the best built, best imagined worlds fall easily into the background and inform the reader of the world around them when want to look about. That is not easy to do because you somehow have to explain how the bunnies became mutated, where did they get their chain-guns from and why they took up the chain-guns in the first place. Maybe every mutated bunny does not want to use their chain gun. Maybe they want a rocket launcher. Maybe some of them aren’t feeling the chain gunning as much as the rest of the Bunnies.
Stopping the narrative to have two of Bunnies argue the merits of the Chain-gun over the rocket launcher and who made them and why, often just won’t work. Why? Because the Mutated Bunnies know all this. It’s what is known to them and therefore they don’t stop to explain this to one another while the reader listens in. Have you ever stood on a subway platform and have the person next to you explain what the subway is, why it exists and why you’re all standing there? Ever have someone come out of the bathroom and explain exactly what they just did in there and what happened when they flushed? (well some of you may have if you know ‘that dude’) The reason is because we all know this information so there’s no reason to discuss it. In fact, in some cases social morays actually prohibit you from pointing out or explaining something that is “inappropriate”. We may refer to it, and an alien listener, i.e. reader, might infer from those references what it going on while these two people stand around impatiently ignoring the large mass of people about them and staring down a large tube into the darkness while standing on a yellow line that several signs about them expressly prohibit them from standing on.
The same holds true for the Bunnies. Perhaps Rocket Launcher’s are frowned upon because in 2147 the Exgenys Corporation stole patents and intellectual property from the Inxel Corporation regarding animal super soldiers and various weapons platforms for support of said super soldiers. The impending court battle led to a separation of the patents whereby the Chaingun patent and Super Soldier serum for Bunnies was awarded to Exgenys. Not satisfied with the ruling of the courts, Exgenys went on to breed said super soldier bunnies, armed them with chain-guns built for their little but capable paws and unleashed them on Inxel Corporation. Inxel fought back with poorly remade Super Soldier Squirrel Monkeys armed with Rocket Launchers. In the end Exgenys and its Bunnies won out, but the body counts of the bunnies was very high at the hands of the rocket flinging Monkeys.
Thus happened the first open corporate military action in what later turned out to be a long series of skirmishes that devastated vast parts of the world and that was referred to as the “Great Corporate War”. That was later relabeled as the GCW I when, after fifty years of peace, a second rash of battles erupted over terra-forming rights for Mars where Mutated Crabs were hard at work and wanted to unionize became GCW II.
See? It’s all very interesting, but unless part of the narrative happens in a history class for the mutated bunnies all these little nuggets don’t come up naturally. Even then it might be showing the hand of the Author in that the narrative going into the history class only exists to deliver all of these facts to the reader in a nice little package.
For me the best world building is done outside of the narrative. The little details and facts just drop into place as the story unfolds and the characters, or narrator, fill in the spaces as it makes sense. Often through references that don’t give the reader the whole background and genealogical history of the place or person.
Han was definitely in it for the money. At least at the start. And why not? That worked out well for him. But I am not here to Channel my Inner Han Solo today.
Today I am saying that I am NOT in it for the money. Mostly because of the wonderful overlords who continue to pay me well, for what I don’t even know, in my day job.
I can’t do this on Amazon as it’s not allowed, but if you complain to Amazon they will price match if they get enough grief.
So why go free? Well unlike Mr. Solo, I did not start off trying to make money with my writing. Probably helps that I don’t have a price on my head and all, so it’s really not an apples to apples comparison. I wanted to get back to writing, which I have done for most of life, including a handwritten book scribbled on loose leaf that came in around 300 pages that I wrote in 7th grade. From there I wanted to share what I was doing with some of my knuckleheaded friends and then well, why not include the rest of the human race (at least those with internet access and an e reader)?
So there it is, Contact and Connect are now as free as I can make them. If you want a copy and can’t figure out Smashwords feel free to leave me an note in the comments and I will work it out with you.